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It was Jennifer’s birthday.
Mom made her wear that shiny blue dress she hated.
She blew out the candles and Mom collapsed.
“An aneurism,” The doctor said.
I take it back she thought,
That wasn’t what I meant.
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This time the Trifecta editors want 33 words in addition to and preceding the following:
“That wasn’t what I meant.”
Go take a look at the Trifecta Writing Challenge.
Oh. NO!
we all wish for those words , those moments we wish we hadn’t thought or said it, whatever “it” is.
but a great take on the prompt.
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Thanks. “That wasn’t what I meant” conjures up images, for me, of “wanting a do-over” or “regrets”. This is sort of an extreme example of that.
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That would be the worst. Thanks goodness all of our thoughts are not manifested.
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Agreed – we should always be careful what we wish for.
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Whoops! This is really good!
Ally 🙂
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Thank you. I am encouraged by your words.
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Wow, powerful!
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You, are a kind and talented individual. Thanks.
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Oh dear! The phrase ‘Be careful what you wish for’ never made more sense! Love your take on the prompt!
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Gracias – thanks for reading
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Yikes. You pack a punch right there. Nice job. Thanks for linking up!
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Thanks
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These birthday wishes can come true, but with regrets. Nice take on the prompt.
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Thank you for stopping by!
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Whoa! So you went there. I happen to know some people who have had that thought, though maybe they didn’t use a birthday wish on it. Nicely played.
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Thanks for the compliment and congratulations on the your “resilience” win. I laughed out loud at your “tyrant” post this week.
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Wow, very nice. I like the honesty…!
Allison Katelyn @ http://SimpleSilverLinings.blogspot.com
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glad you enjoyed it.
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Good writing, but sad. Very touching scene.
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Thanks
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Our minds went to the same morbid place. But, I love how you left her wish as something the reader gets to assume rather than something that was openly stated.
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Excellent concept and really well executed in 38 words, there was an entire story in it. Poor kid.
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Thanks for the encouragement.
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That’s it. You win.
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I don’t think so but, I do thank you for appreciating it.
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Yikes! I like that you don’t explicitly tell us what she wished for. Very well constructed.
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thanks for reading and thanks again for thinking about it.
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Awww. You wrapped up a few emotions in so few words. Nice job!
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I am pleased that you enjoyed it. Come back. Read more. Anytime.
Really!
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what a cool piece
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Thanks very much
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