“Portishead? What part of Saskatchewan is that in?”
“Not in Saskatchewan. Not even close. Not far from Bristol though”
“So what about it then?”
“Holidays Dad. Holidays”
“When are ya goin’?”
“We”
“We what?”
“When are we goin’, Dad”
“I’m not goin’.”
“Sure ya are.”
“Nope, not me.”
“Ya can write there, Dad.”
“Write what?”
“Yer poems.”
“I don’t write. I specially don’t write poems.”
“They’re stuck up on post it notes all over the house.”
“Crap”
“I like this one, Dad”
“What’s it say?”
“’This is the beginning of forever and ever’”
“Sounds more like a fortune cookie, ya ask me.”
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“Here’s a good start on another, ‘Two young hares, rump to rump like dueling pistols, crouched by the gate.’ Pretty deep that. Where ya goin’ with that one, Dad?”
“’Spose, I’m goin’ to fuckin’ Portishead with that one, eh.”
“Yep, ‘spose so.”
Third place in the SpeakEasy – No one is more surprised than I. No one is more honored than I. Too cool. Too cool.
Rules:
• Your post must be dated April 6, 2013, or later.
• Submissions must be 750 words or fewer.
• Submissions must be fiction or poetry.
• You must include the following sentence ANYWHERE in your submission: “Two young hares, rump to rump like dueling pistols, crouched by the gate.”
• You must also include a reference to the media prompt
pretty much every one of your posts makes me smile. Yup. they do.
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That the nicest thing anyone has said to me all day. Thanks Maggie.
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and you’ve been up for a while, right? 😉
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’bout 18 minutes but I still love your comment!
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Oh my god, I love this. I love the cantankerous old man’s voice, I love that I absolutely heard it in the dialect that you wrote it in, and I love that that last line made me laugh out loud, it could not have ended on a more perfect note.
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Thank you, thank you, thank you.
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This one cracked me up! Great voice for the old man and such realistic back and forth.
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🙂
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I love the dialect and the conversation. Super.
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thank you very much indeed. I am pleased.
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I’m chuckling. I am particularly impressed that you did all that with excellent dialogue and no explanation or even tags. This is a lovely piece of writing.
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thanks – glad you liked it!
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This is an extremely clever way of using the prompts. Thanks I sure enjoyed it.
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Thanks to you Ranu
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This, I love. Brilliant use of the prompt and dialog.
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Thanks Stacie. That means a lot.
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LOL! I love this. Great dialogue – and fantastic use of Portishead. I’m still chuckling. 🙂
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Good. Thank you so much.
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This is great – “Dad” made me smile. Amazing what you can build with so few words.
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I am pleased that you liked it. Thanks for letting me know.
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Your dialog is fantastic No need to describe the characters or the story, your dialog did it all. Well done!
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Thank you for stopping by to read!
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This sounds like a conversation I might have had with Grandpa many years ago. The cross between being ornery and lovable, and ultimately funny, cracked me up.
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We all know people with such persona’s. I am glad it came through.
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Made me giggle a bit and think of my fiancés father. He’s ornery as well but loveable =)
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I’m a bit ornery myself.
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Yea!
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