I Can’t Stay Mad at You – I’ll Have to Kill You Instead
Yesterday, I was preparing my entry for the Yeah Write ‘Gargleblaster’ challenge. I found this wonderful new challenge a while ago, shortly after the closing of Trifecta. Both Gargleblaster and Trifecta emphasize precision in writing, paring the superfluous. Gargleblaster responses are limited to 42 words where Trifecta had been limited to 33.
The Gargleblaster kickoff post yesterday included a link to a fine Globe and Mail article about ten words that could be easily eliminated from your writing to make it stronger. These were:
Really, Stuff, Quite, Amazing, Very, Just, Things, Got, Perhaps/Maybe, Literally
Rebelliously, I managed to work them all into my Gargleblaster entry. It was great fun. Today, I thought a good exercise would be to limit my Daily Prompt response to a 33 word microfiction (viva Trifecta). Then I decided to challenge myself a bit more and do it twice. Once without the Globe and Mail’s 10 words and once with all 10 – I wasn’t sure it would be possible.
Without the ten from the article I came up with:
Rick looked at Angie. Angie looked at Rick.
“I’m so sorry Ricky.”
“It’s OK kiddo. It’ll be alright.”
“But will we be alright?”
“Of course we will.”
He grabbed her throat and squeezed.
Including the ten from the article I got:
“I’m really very sorry Ricky. It’s amazing, but things just got out of hand. I don’t quite know how.
“Perhaps, you’ll forget this stuff. I am literally very afraid.”
He grabbed her throat.
I’m still not sure it’s possible. I got two stories that are similar but different… Maybe that’s the point.
Journeyman I Can’t Stay Mad at You- A Story About a Man……
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ALIEN AURA’S BLOG: IT’LL BLOW YOUR MIND! I can’t stay mad at you… littlegirlstory I Can’t Stay Mad at You – that’s a waste of my precious time !
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