My horse took off
The rattler what spooked her is long gone
Stark white, the splintered end of my femur contrasts against the dusty black leather of my chaps
Above, they fly in circles, lower and lower
Waiting for me to go
Word Count – 42
Why Do Birds Suddenly Appear?
tnkerr-Writing Prompts and Practice 
Well done, this made my stomach turn. great writing.
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I’m hoping that making your stomach turn is a good thing. Thanks for the accolades.
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Aww…horror awaits!
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If I ever find myself in this position I hope I have a gun. Gracias.
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Ha!
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Good one! loved the image.
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Thanks – glad you liked it.
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Nice take. Love the last line: Above, they fly in circles, lower and lower, Waiting for me to go.
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I am happy. Happy, happy, happy. Thanks so much.
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Last line brings it all together.. wow, lovely piece.
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That means a lot coming from you. Thanks
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eek! How awful for that person! But great story!
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Thanks Jen. Thanks
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How eerie! Gave me goosebumps thinking of how he’s just waiting to die and be picked cleaned!
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I hope you’re ok with goosebumps Renada. Your piece this week is one of your best. I loved it!
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the waiting, the knowledge that you are what they desire.
shivers…
so good,
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Thank you Kir.
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Twisted! Very nice. The best 42 I’ve read for this challenge.
I can see them circling and I know why they suddenly appeared….
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I am smilin’. It made sense. Thanks for reading and letting me know.
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I’m telling you, birds are just the most vicious of creatures. The wait and swoon in for the kill, pun intended.
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My mother used to say that a pun was the lowest form of wit. I think you just proved her wrong. Your words mean a lot. Gracias.
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This is my favorite so far. So dark and beautiful. In the second line do you mean “that” not “what”?
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Thanks for the kind words, they are always appreciated. By way of explanation on my word choice – I thought long and hard before using “what”. I finally opted to use it because of all the “real” cowboys I know at least half of them would say the snake “what” spooked her. The other half would say “that”. I chose to go with the color, but could just as easily have gone the other way.
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Oh, wow! Thanks for the awesome explanation of cowboy-talk. I love your word choice, and I would have made the same decision if I spoke cowboy. You have corrected an editor. 🙂
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I loved the use of “that”! I physically shivered! One of my favorites so far!
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Thank you . I am encouraged by all the nice comments I have received today. Thank you.
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Wonderful imagery.
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Thanks for saying so.
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The poor cowboy lying in the desert, waiting for the inevitable. How powerfully conveyed in just 42 words!!
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I’m glad it’s not me there in the desert. I’m also glad it’s not you. I appreciate your reading and commenting.
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Very cool take on the prompt. Nice job!
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Thank you. I appreciate your feedback.
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Wow–very grueling imagery!
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Thanks Marcy – I guess I wasn’t very abstract, was I?
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Wow, talk about a bad ride. lol, good job.
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Great descriptions here.
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Gracias
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Ouch! Not the femur. Great images. Well done.
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Yeah, the femur. I needed to make sure it hurt real bad! LOL
Thank you
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A full story–beginning, middle, end–in just 42 words. Awesome work!
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I already look like a scarecrow – no need to make a scarecrow look more like me. Thanks for the read and the feedback.
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