She pulled him so close that he could sense the warm blood coursing beneath the ardor of her breast.
Peace came, with the sharp prick of his bite.
Merciful venom.
The asp slithered away unsatisfied, the late queen too large to consume.
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Top Row Seven – How Cool is That?
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This is outstanding! Fun to read and surprise ending, it just doesn’t get any better than this.
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Thanks Kevin. Is it OK if I call you Kevin?
By the way, I appreciate the follow. Thanks for that too.
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It is OK indeed sir.
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History. From the snake’s point of view. Cool 🙂
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Gracias Marilyn. Cool is great!
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Classic retelling of the tale. We never did know how the asp felt 🙂
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That’s just what snakes do, I guess.
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Oops. I missed the allusion first time through.
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This is a wonderful response,well done.
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Thank you so much.
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beautifully told!
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🙂
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Too large to consume…and enormously significant, historically speaking. 😉
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That’s looking at the big picture Jennifer.
Thanks
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I like getting the story from the asp’s point of view. Very creative!
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Keep smiling Marcy. Glad you thought so.
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I enjoyed this piece, especially that fantastic last line :)) Well done!
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I’m glad you liked it. Thanks.
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Good one!
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Thanks Sue.
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The asp was making a small fraction of what Elizabeth Taylor was making. She got revenge the only way she could.
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Violet eyes to die for!
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Love how you managed to slip into that snakeskin, Thom! Also, love that he was unsatisfied, but no late queens appreciate being thought of as ‘too large’ : )
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Large is a relative term Kymm. What may be large to you and I would be insignificant in the mind of say… King Kong. Love your comment and thanks for reading.
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Love this!
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Muchas gracias amiga.
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A snake is never truly satisfied, but this piece filled me up in many ways.
Nice job.
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What a nice thing to say Kir. Thanks for that!
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At first I thought this was going to be about vampires. But it was much better than that!
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I hadn’t even thought about vampires. Wow, wait till next week!
Thanks Stacie.
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I’ll bet that it happened just like that, too! Hopefully, that asp made it out alive…
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I hope so too but with a 42 word limitation I wasn’t able to pursue that line. Thanks Tina.
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Lovely job on the point of view!! Way to get inside the snakes head. Great take on the prompt! ♥
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Thanks Kathy. I like when your smile shows up on my blog. I appreciate you stopping by.
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Poor Cleo, all that fame and she wasn’t even fit to be lunch.
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Thanks Nate. I don’t feel too sorry for her.
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Nice and creepy!
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Thanks for stopping by and having a read. ‘Preciate the comment.
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How disappointing for the asp. Oh, well, can”t eat ’em all…
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And you need take care of the ones you do eat – you might pop a third eye!
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Cleopatra with a third eye. That would be interesting.
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I thought vampires too, and then caught the allusion. Soooo much better than vampires! Great job, Thom – this is really fantastic! Thanks for linking up.
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Ear to ear here Christine. Can you see it?
Thanks so much.
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Vampires came to my mind too… This is just great.
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I think it’s great that so many of you got vampires at the beginning. I can see why but since I had snakes in mind when I began, well, vampires never crossed my mind. It’s an added layer. I love it.
Thanks.
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Poo Cleopatra, fancy being too big to eat. I got the sense that the asp was at peace after the biting – as if the pumping blood had been too much of test and a temptation – and then he was disillusioned with his prize. Enjoyed this a lot.
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🙂
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Nice more hissstory… 😉 Good work!
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Thanks Laith. That means a lot.
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