OLWG · writing

OLWG #5 – Hijo


This weeks prompts:

  1. There’s a hole in my sock
  2. Do as I say, not as I do
  3. Wait, is that a monkey?

Esperanza shook out the match and drew on her freshly lit cigarette as Alfredo walked through the kitchen door from outside. The screen swung as he turned and noticed the look on his mother’s face. He grimaced, and too late he tried to stop the door from slamming.

“Sorry, Mama,” he gently closed the heavier wooden door.

“I got a call from your school today, Fredo,” she said to him. “They told me that you would be late today. They told me that you were smoking between classes and that you had to serve a detention.”

“Sorry, Mama.”

“We’ve talked about this, hijo. I don’t want you smoking.” She stubbed the barely smoked cigarette out in the ashtray on the table.

“But, Mama,” he pointed at her full ashtray and shrugged.

“No hagas lo que hago. Haz lo que te digo.”

“OK, sorry Mama.”


the twenty-five  minutes slipped by too fast. I didn’t get much story in, but maybe just enough character development.

What do you think?