I wrote this for the January 17th Flash Fiction Challenge
Dario was a cad, a reprobate. He knew when he died because the pain disappeared.
Dead Dario rose, brushed imaginary dust from his shoulders, and looked ahead; there was no behind.
He was on a covered walkway surrounding a garth filled with souls of the suffering damned. Tapered stone columns stood like sentries between him and the wretches. Each column, labelled with a lie, that he recognized as one of his own:
Promises he’d never intended to keep, yet made to women he’d wanted.
Yarns spun to investors whose monies he stole.
Dario was a sinner, foreordained to perdition.
The prompt and instructions were:
In 99 words (no more, no less) write a story that includes colonnades. It can be natural, architectural, or a metaphor. Take a stroll and go where the prompt leads.
TN, your Dante muse showed up and led you down a ponderous colonnade of Dead Darius’s life of lies. Good stuff!
LikeLiked by 1 person
You think so? I’m glad you do. Thanks for the encouraging words.
LikeLiked by 1 person
Yes, I do think so!
LikeLiked by 1 person
Hells bells, I had forgotten what a great word is perdition. Thanks!
And how cool to dish that in 99 words.
LikeLiked by 2 people
Thanks – I like that you like.
LikeLiked by 1 person
he recognized one of his own….. powerful line.
Dario deserves perdition.
https://ideasolsi65.blogspot.com/2019/01/the-homecoming.html
LikeLiked by 1 person
I liked your story as well but was not allowed to comment on it. I believe that there is more to the story than could fit within the 99 words. You did well.
LikeLike
Boy. There’ll be lots of politicians taking that walk.
LikeLiked by 2 people
I hope he can repent even after death. Will the perdition consider that? Or is it endless irrespective of repentance?
LikeLiked by 1 person
I’m not sure how that would work. I suppose, since it isn’t defined in the story we can each decide how we want it to be.
LikeLiked by 1 person
😀 OK.
LikeLike