Written in 16 minutes, with the Carrizozo Writers- Raw, unedited, exactly as it flowed through my fingers to the keyboard
First Go
You’ve changed, she said
I should hope so
The old you would never have said that. Why did you say that now?
I thought about her question for a while, because, I’m not that old me, anymore, I replied This is another me. I didn’t like that other guy anymore. I grew weary of having him around. No one liked him. He was a Dick.
Well, you weren’t that bad, although you did tend to revel in your authority, or at least the authority you believed you had.
Yeah, you hit the nail on the head there. I learned about authority when I decided to change.
I learned about authority when I began to remake myself.
I figured out that the only one I could even pretend to have authority over was myself, and I had no business trying to tell anyone else what to do or when to do it, or how it should be done.
You’re still kind of a Dick though, she advised.
I know, but I’m working on it.
Second Go
Detective Constable Sue Holmes pushed open the door of the ancient brick garage beneath the bridge and shone her torch into the gloom. The stench was overpowering and she backed out. She pulled a scarf from her jacket pocket and tied it around the lower part of her face. She went back in and looked around.
Later, on the hand held, she called it into the precinct.
“I’ve got a possible 187,” she reported to dispatch, “although, it looks more like a sacrifice than a simple murder. You should send backup and a coroner. I haven’t found his head yet. I’m still looking.”
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time’s up – step away
The prompts
- looks more like a sacrifice
- another me
- the apple revels in its authority
the second one is a headlong rush into horror —
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Yeah, I think so.
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it’s very well done —
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I read this – and thought I left a comment WP Gremlins at work…
Fun reads.
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The second one was grisly 🙂 It is so satisfying when our thoughts just come out instinctively.
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I know. That is part of what I like about prompts and short timed writings. Thanks for visiting! Thanks for commenting.
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