Gargleblaster #168: The Mermaid

On 29/06/201402/07/2014 By tnkerrIn Random Scribbles, writing

There was poundin’ on the door.
BANG, BANG
I can’t ignore him, he won’t leave.

Through the door I say, “I know what you want, Cap’n.
“She’s not here. I threw her back.”

“Arrgh, Ya won’t mind if we look around then.”

Holy smokes – A prize “Top Row Seven” I am honored and excited.

47 thoughts on “Gargleblaster #168: The Mermaid”

jetgirlcos

“Murdered by pirates is good.” 🙂

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29/06/2014 at 1327 Reply
1. tnkerr
  
  Thank you Ms. JetGirl. Glad you stopped by.
  
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  30/06/2014 at 0413 Reply
Christine

Fabulous! It’s a great little vignette, and you answered the question very well. Thanks for linking it up!

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29/06/2014 at 2134 Reply
1. tnkerr
  
  Thanks Christine. I’m pleased that you liked it.
  
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  30/06/2014 at 0415 Reply
Jo-Anne Teal (@jtvancouver)

I agree with Christine, it is a full and well-imagined response to the question. Nicely done!!

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29/06/2014 at 2230 Reply
1. tnkerr
  
  Thanks. I appreciate your coming by and taking the time to read and comment.
  
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  30/06/2014 at 0418 Reply
glasgowdragonfly

Love the suspense you have created here. I can picture it as a movie scene. I was trying to go in a similar direction for my mermaid tale but just couldn’t find the words. I’m glad I went off in a different direction now as you covered it so well!

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29/06/2014 at 2257 Reply
1. tnkerr
  
  I was seeing the scene as I wrote it as well. I’m a sucker for pirate movies. Thanks.
  
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  30/06/2014 at 0420 Reply
YeshuM

Love the take. Perfect amount of rum to boot.

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29/06/2014 at 2342 Reply
1. tnkerr
  
  Thanks – glad you liked it!
  
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  30/06/2014 at 0421 Reply
Jennifer G. Knoblock

Great voice, and I love the dialogue. Fun!

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30/06/2014 at 0158 Reply
1. tnkerr
  
  Thanks for this comment Jennifer. I’m glad that you enjoyed it.
  
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  30/06/2014 at 0424 Reply
That Unique* Weblog

Love the pirate addition! And I want to know if she is still inside…scary!

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30/06/2014 at 0415 Reply
1. tnkerr
  
  I like to include pirates whenever possible. I’m thinking about taking Pirateology classes at the local Junior College. Considering a career change.
  I’m glad you liked it. Thanks.
  
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  30/06/2014 at 0426 Reply
Marcy

“I threw her back”–loved that line, capturing both her fish half and her human half

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30/06/2014 at 0454 Reply
1. tnkerr
  
  Thanks Marcy.
  
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  30/06/2014 at 0843 Reply
MamaMickTerry

You always have something delightful and wicked to offer. Loved this!!

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30/06/2014 at 0455 Reply
1. tnkerr
  
  I’m glad you liked this one. I’m happy that you took the time to let me know. I’m all about positive reinforcement over here.
  Thanks
  
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  30/06/2014 at 0844 Reply
  1. MamaMickTerry
    
    Absolutely! My words just jump out when I see something that strikes me. Your piece did it for me 🙂
    
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    30/06/2014 at 1306
blainecindy

Hee-hee! I love how you “threw her back!”

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30/06/2014 at 0524 Reply
1. tnkerr
  
  Thanks – When it comes to mermaids, I adhere to a strict “catch and release” regimen.
  
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  30/06/2014 at 0849 Reply
Kathy Combs (@KathyCombs16)

I love this! The idea of throwing her back…brilliant! ♥

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30/06/2014 at 0729 Reply
1. tnkerr
  
  Thanks Kathy. It’s good to see your smiling face in the comments section of my blog.
  
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  30/06/2014 at 0850 Reply
Kir Piccini

Classic police tactics …loved the line about “throwing her back”, that should buy him a few minutes. Just keep them away from the tub. 😉

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30/06/2014 at 0755 Reply
1. tnkerr
  
  Yeah – “Of course you can look around, just don’t go in the bathroom!”
  Ha ha. Thanks Kir.
  
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  30/06/2014 at 0810 Reply
saroful

And now I’m walking around the house saying “ARRRRRR” but at least I remembered to set my coffee down before reading 🙂

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30/06/2014 at 0820 Reply
1. tnkerr
  
  Some believe that a pirate’s favorite letter would be the R but, it’s not. A pirate’s favorite letter would be the C!
  
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  30/06/2014 at 0842 Reply
  1. Michael
    
    I was going to leave that comment myself, but I see you’re already familiar with it. Bravo. And great story. 😀
    
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    01/07/2014 at 1733
Mike

I hope for his sake he did throw her back.
I enjoyed this, a great take on the prompt.

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30/06/2014 at 0835 Reply
1. cynkingfeeling
  
  I’m feeling a bit anxious wondering whether he’s lying or not, too.
  
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  30/06/2014 at 1228 Reply
tnkerr

Thank you Mike. I figger ya cain’t go to far wrong when yer characters be pirates.

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30/06/2014 at 0852 Reply
TMW Hickman

Those sea captains are a persnickety bunch, aren’t they? This was cute!

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30/06/2014 at 1343 Reply
1. tnkerr
  
  They’re not to be trusted either. Thank you for thinking this cute.
  
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  30/06/2014 at 2130 Reply
thewizardsword

Really nice take on the prompt. You nailed it!

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30/06/2014 at 1412 Reply
my white picket life

That was fun!

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30/06/2014 at 1434 Reply
1. tnkerr
  
  Thanks, Fun is like the Hokey Pokey!
  
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  30/06/2014 at 2145 Reply
Natalie DeYoung

Pirates. Man. I know they’re dirty, nasty villains, but I can’t help my affection for a good “arrrrr.”

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30/06/2014 at 2111 Reply
1. tnkerr
  
  I hear ya, Natalie. I hear ya.
  
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  30/06/2014 at 2144 Reply
KymmInBarcelona

‘I threw her back’ lol I know a few who might wish they could have said that about me. Hahaha Great post, Thom!

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01/07/2014 at 0301 Reply
1. tnkerr
  
  Great to hear from you Kymm. Thanks
  
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  01/07/2014 at 0554 Reply
Meg

I love your stories. I also love pirates. It’s a double-love day.

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01/07/2014 at 0536 Reply
1. tnkerr
  
  🙂 Thanks Meg!
  
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  01/07/2014 at 0553 Reply
innatejames

I like that your story continues off the page. Well done! It’s one of my contenders!

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01/07/2014 at 0728 Reply
1. tnkerr
  
  Hey thank you sir.
  
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  01/07/2014 at 0810 Reply
April C.

I love it. Pirates are so much fun in the dangerous, murderous sense. I totally got Blackbeard images.

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01/07/2014 at 1902 Reply
1. tnkerr
  
  Arrrgh, then I done good matey.
  Thanks
  
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  01/07/2014 at 2006 Reply
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